http://hyarmi-records.livejournal.com/ ([identity profile] hyarmi-records.livejournal.com) wrote in [personal profile] rosiphelee 2005-05-17 05:34 pm (UTC)

I needed the ch 1 refresher, thanks!

I know you're probably not looking for nitpicks, but I figured I'd just point this one out:
"As they drove through the suburbs of Wasingham they left the rain behind them. As they neared the centre of town they hit heavy traffic."
The two sentences have an identical beginning and structure.

*charges off to chapter two*

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